I'm playing again today, trying to decide how many of these I can create for a wee chapbook. Let me know what you think. The feedback will help me determine which goes in and which stays out.
Thanks for giving your opinion on 1.) whether poem is accentuated by this photo, 2.) whether placement of poem should shift to a different position or take on a different color font, or 3.) should I give up the idea of doing a chapbook of this type.
Waiting for opinions,
I think this is perfect. I actually sighed and listened to my muse, whispering in my ear.ReplyDelete
What a wonderful book this would be!
Thanks, Denise. I'm glad you liked it. I'd like to put about thirty of these together and then see about getting it published.ReplyDelete
Liking this, Claudsy -- keep going! :-)ReplyDelete
Okay, thanks, Pamela. That's two votes for the project, not counting mine.ReplyDelete
Hi, Claudsy. Just one thing - move the poem a bit downwards, just a little bit. That way you leave a "breather" on top.ReplyDelete
This kind of chapbook is the perfect one. I made one like this and my husband made the pics, it is a wonderful piece of art because of his art, not so much because of the poems, of course.
It will be pleasure to the eyes as well, as to the poetic taste.
Go for it.
I agree, Mariya. I am going to have to move the poem down and to the left, I think, although the jury's still out on that one.Delete
I'm glad you like the idea of a chapbook of these types of pages. Whether it works out the way I want is another question altogether.
Thanks so much. I do appreciate everyone's input on this.
Very pleasing font - great contrasts- color vivid and ethereal photo is integral and on point - and sigh....the placement of the moon perfect... Is there a theme?ReplyDelete
Thank you so much, Pearl. Theme? I'm not sure yet. It's odd, but I put one of these together on pure whim, or some would say, Muse does. Most have the same feel to them, although there are some which fall slightly outside that mold. I'll have to look back at all of those I've done so far to see about theme. It could be that Muse has taken that route without my notice. Thank you again.Delete
My vote is to continue writing these.ReplyDelete
I'm a minimalist by nature, and prefer to read treasures like yours in a plain font. The treasure is the written content, not the font. The pictures act as support to your words but are not (IMO) a priority. In a way, I like my own 'pictures' to form when I read a poem (or read anything for that matter), and I often find that piccies intrude on that process. I'm not saying that I think you should omit them - not at all, I'm just saying I might mentally block them whilst reading. :)
~ Misky xx
Ah, my little minimalist friend. I do these for play, for whimsy, as much as anything. They are a way for me to explore another thought process, to merge prose and poetry in a different way, since setting is so important many times to the believeability of the story.Delete
I can understand your response and don't take it personally. Far from it. As with everyone, mood and expectations often color our responses, mine especially. I'll always take feedback from you with eagerness. Thank you again, my friend.
Very beautiful poem, and the perfect picture for it. I agree with Mariya: just a touch down, and I'll add one other thought: a touch to the right also. It offsets the poem (visually), and gives the moon a bit more space...ReplyDelete
The chapbook idea is terrific!
Thank you, Richard. Since I already know that I'm changing its position, I'll check out your suggestion as well.ReplyDelete
Thanks again. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes, I think I will do the chapbook. I have little to lose but time and lots to gain.
Hi Claudsy, I agree with the bringing it down just a touch and maybe a little larger font. I love the poem, looking forward to seeing more of your talent!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Sara. I'll see what I can do about enlarging the type a smidge. Glad you liked it.ReplyDelete
This is beautiful. Are you no longer using this blog?ReplyDelete